Tell Me What You Think!

Hi guys. so heres a poem thingy I wrote. Most of my writing is like sad or depressing. So, I tried to make this one a little more idk happy (though its not happy per say. Anyway) here it is. Tell me what you think.

Trapped by all these walls.

Try to pick myself up, but I fall.

Looking for someone who can see

Not the outside, but the real me.

Suddenly I see him. His face is so sweet.

I try to walk toward him without looking at my feet.

He sees me, he smiles. Embrasses me with comfort.

He looks at me. He kisses me. He knows I’ve suffered.

He strokes my head, looks into my eyes.

I look at him trying not to cry.

He takes my hand and holds it tight.

Finally I see the light.

He takes me home, He holds me close.

It may not be all butterflies and rainbows.

But at least he keeps me safe and worm,

And will always shield me from the depressing storm.

Well, there you go.

EmoGirl

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11:32 PM, Jun. 20, 2007 .. Posted by RangerM

did u buy ur set? my set is a piece of crap. but my cymbals are rly good there sabian. next i'm getting a snare that slipknots drummer made then a double bass pedal (peral) then a set of Jet black peral drums.

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7:48 AM, Jun. 21, 2007 .. Posted by Chris

hey i like the poem!

and yeah i have left ppl comments that were meant for someone else lol yeah that is sorta funny when that happens :)

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10:24 AM, Jun. 21, 2007 .. Posted by learnmylingo

Hey, that's good. =D

-Erin

Note from Brielle

11:33 AM, Jun. 21, 2007 .. Posted by BrielleCostumes

Hello,
Thank you for visiting my realm…your comment was most welcome.
I want to also say thank you for compliments in regards to my Tia Dalma costume.
It’s so encouraging to know that others enjoy looking at my costumes also.

I hope you have a wonderful day!
Sincerely,
Brielle

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12:07 PM, Jun. 21, 2007 .. Posted by RangerM

oOo i have to buy all my stuff. but me my brother and friend are goin to start one. my Brother on Bass, my friend on Guitar, me on drums but we need a singer :(

Hello!

1:59 PM, Jun. 21, 2007 .. Posted by funkyleo

Hello, you MIGHT like my friend Ashland, her username is mikeydepirate, and her blog is homeschoolblogger.com/girloftheyear.

Kelsey

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2:22 PM, Jun. 21, 2007 .. Posted by RangerM

hey when we get big i'll let u come play at a concert. we are goin to be a singing band and screaming band.
thats what we like.

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4:12 PM, Jun. 21, 2007 .. Posted by RangerM

maby Sons of Light in a world of darkness or Sons of light thats what we are thinkin about right now.

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10:04 PM, Jun. 21, 2007 .. Posted by ForeverConfused

aww that was cute. Those little emoish people creatures are adorable.

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11:59 PM, Jun. 21, 2007 .. Posted by RangerM

ye it is hard to find a good name :(

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7:52 PM, Jun. 22, 2007 .. Posted by learnmylingo

No, actually, I don't go to Hot Topic much... I was just there looking for green Chucks. It really was an exception. I can buy all my junk other places. =] It's cheaper.

-Erin

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12:45 PM, Jun. 23, 2007 .. Posted by 10jellybeans

Hey I'm 10jellybeans.
Wanna be friends? And your poem is soooo great

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5:29 PM, Jun. 24, 2007 .. Posted by RangerM

ye thanks I don't know if thats goin to be the name yet.

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1:08 PM, Jun. 25, 2007 .. Posted by RangerM

yes I have All-star baseball this weekend through next week :)

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2:30 PM, Jun. 25, 2007 .. Posted by Free2bme

That is a really awesome poem, I like it alot. Very beautiful.

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12:30 PM, Jun. 27, 2007 .. Posted by MeltedFire

hi. i luv ur blog! i found it on RangerM! can i add u 2 my friendz?

Andie

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12:42 AM, Jul. 1, 2007 .. Posted by learnmylingo

Hey, you, like, really need to post, girl...

-Erin

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1:09 PM, Aug. 3, 2007 .. Posted by 10jellybeans

That is really good. ur very talented!!!!

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8:40 PM, Sep. 8, 2007 .. Posted by Anonymous

Why are you a emo? They are so stupid!!