This is what I write
Dec. 7, 2008
Writing assignment #6
DEAD WORDS:  funny, strange,hard, soft,flat

ROOM TOUR:
As you walk into my room, you would first notice my pink carpet. It would be bright pink, and  it would feel almost like an old fleece blanket, spread on a  hardwood floor. As you look up from the carpet, you would see a small door, made of some kind of  caramel-colored wood. You would open it in curiosity, and find that it is a narrow tunnel, but looks like an attic, and is as skin-tingling hot, or  as freezing cold as the weather is. You would close the little wood door, and  turn a 90 degree angle to the right. There you would find, a quite simple little bed, made of dark brown wood, and covered with a quilt sprinkled with a soft pink shower of flowers, and a few tiny yellow and black butterflies, hovering over the top of the flowers. You would also find four gray windows , two on the bottom, two on the top. You would look out them, and would see a big backyard. Then you will have decided you have stayed there long enough, and would walk out of my room,  and then went down the stairs



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Dec. 7, 2008 - Untitled Comment

Posted by SavedGirl

Dear Emy,

It sounds like a fun room. Maybe someday I will actually get to see it.

Lulu

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Dec. 9, 2008 - Lesson 6

Posted by skmarlow

Great dead words for your "collection." LOL

I liked how you used the sense of touch in your tour of your bedroom: "fleece blanket" "skin-tingling" are excellent word choices and helped me imagine what your room looks like. Nice job!

(I did find a couple of 'dead' words. LOL "quite simple")
:-)

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Dec. 10, 2008 - Description

Posted by Mammam

Great description, Emy! I enjoyed reading that.
Love Mammam XO

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