BEFORE: It rained all week during our camping trip.
AFTER: We were in the car when it all happened. The clouds blocked out the light-blue sky. Then the watery raindrops fell from the black, angry clouds.  The rain sounded like plip, plop, plip, plop, on our blue sedan's
shiny roof. I tried to wash the fact out of my brain that we probably won't be having any fun on THIS camping trip.

BEFORE: Katy saw a scary sea creature at the aquarium.
AFTER: four-year-old Katy Gibson  held her mother's soft hand as she walked into the local aquarium. She stared at the Great-White shark that hung over her head. It was the size of an elephant, with two little, piggy eyes and rows and rows of  white, pointy teeth. Her eyes grew big as she whimpered and steered her mother's hand the opposite direction.

BEFORE: As I entered the cave, I found the object of my search—the lost
treasure chest of the Ancients.
AFTER:  I spied a cave, half hidden by leafy branches, so I went inside. Just inside the cave stood a four-hundred year old ceder chest. The wood was green, and that indicated that the wood was rotten, so I sped out of the cave, and grabbed a branch with a hooked  end. The inside of me was bubbling with excitement as I ran towards the dim cave and cracked opened the mysterious box. I felt myself gasp as I looked inside. It was the long lost golden anchor that ruined the Galkone  family!