Nov. 19, 2008
Reach For The Stars! Before And After Your Turn! Lesson 6
Before: When the bee stung Nate it hurt!
After: When the wasp flew by and stung Nate's arm Nate shrieked at the top of his lungs! He quickly grabbed a fern and vigorously rubbed the fern juice on his red, throbbing wasp sting. When the wasp sting finally stopped throbbing, Nate turned and said angrily,"I am going to hunt that wasp down and destroy him and his nest!"
More Practice
Character: Oreo Emotion: Happy
Oreo ran though the kitchen,"Today is the day some of my friends and I are going to the Giant Waterfall!" she exclaimed happily. Then Oreo twirled around the dinner table. Her eyes sparkled with happiness and she leaped for joy!
Character: Rollo Emotion: Sad
Rollo sat on the floor hanging his head trying to keep his tears from gushing out. He tried to hide but everywhere he went all his friends were scurrying around trying to get ready to go to the Giant Waterfall. Rollo started to sob, then he couldn't hold back the tears any longer, he let them gush out like the Giant Waterfall!
Character: Pepper Emotion: Hungry
With all the excitement, about going to the Giant Waterfall, it made Pepper a little hungry. Pepper went into the kitchen, he sniffing all the cupboards, the refrigerator and the pantry trying to figure out what he wanted to eat. His stomach started to rumble and ache his mouth was watering, then he finally decided he will eat the next thing he sees.
Character: Nate Emotion: Angry
Nate was getting ready for his once a year shower, when a whole army of hamsters poked their little heads out from under the bathroom rug. Nate was so furious! "You little pests better get out of here before I destroy your little village, like I did last year! GET OUT, NOW!" Yelled Nate.
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Nov. 25, 2008
Lesson 6- Writing Cameras Part 1
Posted by SuzyScribbles
Oh, Joy, this is GREAT. You showed your hamsters' emotions very well....I loved reading about them. I also noticed that you fixed lesson 5 to write words that SHOW the feelings. Thank you for correcting that.
All in all, an excellent lesson here.
-s-
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Dec. 1, 2008
Oreo
Posted by Miss Kirsten
Joy,
This is a perfect example of what you can do when you take a simple word or phrase and write about it with great detail. I really liked how you used different body parts and senses to highlight Peppers hunger. I also was able to feel Oreos happiness and Rollos sadness when they hear about the trip to the Great Waterfall. I wonder what the Great Waterfall is? Hmmm
. I am getting so excited about reading your story when it is complete.
Miss Kirsten
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