• Apr. 15, 2009
Lesson 8 Too Many Pics?

Character: Rollo and N8

Setting: Swimming in a clear pool of water.

    "Today is the perfect day to go swimming!! The sun is shining so the water will be warm!" exclaimed Rollo to himself.

    Rollo was floating peacefully on the surface of the clear, fresh water that flowed from the 15  foot waterfall. When suddenly, a wave larger than the waterfall, consumed Rollo. All Rollo knew was, his paw was stuck and he was running out of air! He glanced up and saw N8 wadding in the pool, which was the cause of the giant sudden wave. N8 saw Rollo's limp, furry body in the water, he reached down and picked up the helpless hamster and carried him safely to the sandy shore.

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• Apr. 17, 2009
Lesson 8

Posted by skmarlow

I'm glad the hamsters are back in your lessons, Joy! Nice setting, with a bit of suspense and a good little rescue. I could see them floating and enjoying the time until the "tidal wave."
Good!

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• May. 13, 2009
Lesson 8

Posted by Miss Kirsten

Joy,

I loved this excerpt from your Reach for the Stars lessons. I cannot wait until the entire story about Rollo and his friends is finished. Is this the point in the story where Rollo and N8 become friends instead of adversaries? Does N8 gain any compassion for the plight of the hamsters? Your sentence structure, voice, and word choice shine through in this piece.

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