~ Nov. 13, 2008
Chapter 2~Anew Taken Aback
The voyage was to last one month, which was actually a shorter length trip then most.
Adelina and Jordan were the only kids on the entire ship so they stuck close together.
Adelina’s father had loosened up a little, but he still had a cold look in his eyes.
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“Do you think the captain’s a little mean to the crew?” Adelina asked her mother a week into their journey.
“Well a captain has to be strict, just think if he wasn’t. The ship wouldn’t get anywhere which means we wouldn’t get there, now wouldn’t that be bad?” she told her.
“Yes I guess so, but he doesn’t seem like the kindest man either,” she said.
“Now Adelina, I must agree he doesn’t use the nicest language, especially considering there are women and children aboard, but that is no reason to judge.”
Her mother was the kindest person anyone could ever know and she had quickly made friends with the people aboard, she was Adelina’s roll model, but she would not stand any of her children being disrespectful to their elders.
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Three weeks into the voyage a thunderstorm popped up from nowhere.
Everybody was on deck making it worse. Nobody enjoyed being below deck.
“Don’t you think this ship and voyage are amazing Adelina?” asked
“Honestly I’m not too fond of it, it’s just so boring seeing only water and then there’s nothing to do all day!” she obviously was not enjoying their trip.
“Well right now I have to admit that the waves are starting to get choppy and the wind’s picking up,” he said seriously.
“Everyone below deck!!!!!!!!!” was repeated over and over by the captain. Adelina noticed his voice was fading from all the wind.
Every woman and child went down while the men helped secure the ship.
The ship rocked and turned, making everybody sick to their stomach. Everybody's trucks were sliding back and forth and everyone had to dodge them making it even worse. They had to try and secure them so they wouldn’t bust the ship up from the inside.
The waves gashed at the ship so hard Adelina wondered how the ship was still floating.
“Is everything tied down?” he asked.
Nobody answered but a few nodded their heads.
“Okay then why don’t we all sit down and have a story?” he said it like it was just a normal day on land.
A few people who were still not feeling very good didn’t join them, but that was okay with everyone.
He started telling the story of Jonah and how all the crew was scared during the storm. He told of Moses and the crossing at the
This actually calmed the people under the deck, even though they were rocking and it was cramped.
Finally the storm calmed down, nobody went on deck because they feared of what they might see, plus they still had had no orders. They all thought it was offal quiet up there.
Adelina, on the other hand, had wide eyes and a shivering frame. She was one
They still had not word of what was happening and the ship wasn’t really moving that much, making the crew actually consider their surroundings.
Adelina had recovered also and looked around. She did not see the dark haired lady that she knew as her mother. She started asking around and wondering.
“Everybody on deck immediately,” said a voice of a sailor. It sounded tired and a bit mournful.
Everybody stepped up to see a wet, tired crew, and all of them were looking out to sea on one side of the ship.
The sea was as peaceful as ever and looked like it had stayed that way the entire time of the storm. Though one of the ship’s masts were broken and it had fallen on the deck.
All the people who had come up with her immediately had solemn faces that matched the crew’s.
When they had all gathered together, they captain started saying these words:
“The Lord giveth and the Lord taketh,” he said this while patting Adelina’s father on the shoulder.
Adelina’s heart skipped a beat and she turned pale, she knew what had happened.
Some of the women with them started to weep but Adelina’s eyes didn’t drop a tear, she was in too much of shock.
Abigail, Adelina’s mother, had died during the storm. Parts of the ship’s mast had broken off and hit her in the head as she was running.
Adelina’s father looked at he with cold eyes as if it was her fault her mother was dead.
Other's Opinions
• Nov. 16, 2008
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Posted by luckyme
I liked your story!
I'm thinking of starting a story blog. Would you read it if I did?
• Nov. 19, 2008
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Posted by ChristineDaae
Oh that's so sad...keep it up though! Your writing is excellent!
In Christ,
Christine
• Nov. 20, 2008
whoa!
Posted by skmarlow
What a chapter ending. A's mother died? Yikes! How sad. And her father....he is a mean character. I like the internal conflict that you have set up.
Thanks for sharing.....