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Oct. 9, 2008 - Metaphors
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Okay I did this for a school assignment and it turned out really well so I thought I'd post it here!

Strong Metaphors

 

“His mind was an angry sea, full of torment and sorrow lashing wildly against all reason.”

 

“Life is a melody, joyful at times and terrible at others. Who can say how long any one song will last before it is cut off?”

 

“The girl was a possum, curling up into a ball at the first sign of danger, her friend, however, was a wounded bear, snarling viciously at those who threatened the defenseless possum.”

 

“The dirty dishes were a mountain of waste and work looming ahead of her, seeming a plague upon her day.”

 

“The lass bounced up and down, unable to contain her joy which was evident everywhere, it was a breeze softly stirring her hair and setting the flowers to dancing, a whirl of colors, a bird singing merrily  above her, and a gentle whisper.”

tell me what you think!

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Oct. 9, 2008 - Metaphors
Posted in My Stories

Okay I did this for a school assignment and it turned out really well so I thought I'd post it here!

Strong Metaphors

 

“His mind was an angry sea, full of torment and sorrow lashing wildly against all reason.”

 

“Life is a melody, joyful at times and terrible at others. Who can say how long any one song will last before it is cut off?”

 

“The girl was a possum, curling up into a ball at the first sign of danger, her friend, however, was a wounded bear, snarling viciously at those who threatened the defenseless possum.”

 

“The dirty dishes were a mountain of waste and work looming ahead of her, seeming a plague upon her day.”

 

“The lass bounced up and down, unable to contain her joy which was evident everywhere, it was a breeze softly stirring her hair and setting the flowers to dancing, a whirl of colors, a bird singing merrily  above her, and a gentle whisper.”

tell me what you think!

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Oct. 9, 2008 - Untitled Comment
Posted by AndiCarter
I think these are great! I love metaphors, but in our stories we need to make sure we don't use metaphors that are clichιs. A clichι is when a metaphor or simile is overused. Like "Quick as a bunny." or something like that. New, fresh metaphors are wonderful in writing. I like these. Did you find them or make them up yourself?

I haven't been around much. I've been SO busy. I finished Book 5, The Trouble with Treasure. Trying to revise so I can send in to my editor next week.
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Oct. 10, 2008 - Wow!
Posted by AndiCarter
I asked if you had written them mostly because that is a "teacher" question. One always asks students how they came about completing an assignment.

However....I truly thought you had looked them up somewhere because they are SO good! I thought you had done a Google search and found them in great literature somewhere.

I am astounded at these metaphors....especially now that you told me that YOU wrote them. No clichιs here, Margo! They are wonderfully written and very descriptive.

A fine, fine job. Make sure your mom gives you an "A" for this assignment. I would!

Edited by MargoMargolia1 on Oct. 12, 2008 at 6:49 PM
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Oct. 13, 2008 - Untitled Comment
Posted by Dracula95
this one sounds like me:

“The dirty dishes were a mountain of waste and work looming ahead of him, seeming a plague upon his day.”

hahahah....... i am not up to much lately. good luck w/ the contest. and I have never heard of the guy you said ........i said his name 6 time with the accent

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Oct. 13, 2008 - Ha-Ha!
Posted by AndiCarter
good for you, Margo! In one of my books, Andi punches that bully Johnny Wilson, right in the face because he . . . well, I won't spoil it for you. But that book won't be out for a long, long time--a couple of years. If you want to read the chapter where she punches him, e-mail me and I will send the Word document with the actual chapter....one good "fighter" to another.

In other news...when I was about your age (SuzyScribbles), I punched a bully boy in the face, too. He shot a rubber band at me on the school bus and boy did that hurt! Right in the neck! So I got up, approached him through the crowded aisle, and said, sweetly, "W..a..y..n..e..."
When he turned and looked at me, I let him have it. He never bothered me again. LOL

We are definitely kindred spirits!

yes, and I really thought you had gotten those metaphors from a book. :-)
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Oct. 15, 2008 - HEY
Posted by sillystanleystuff
I LOVE THEM! u are a great writer :)

wanna be friends? check out my blog
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Oct. 16, 2008 - hey!!!!!!
Posted by sillystanleystuff
i am sure they were dirty because the water turned a shade of yellow...they had never been washed before :) (concerning the doll's clothes comment you left me)

-Hannah
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