Animal Lover

Oct. 26, 2007

Writing Camera - Part 1

My "really cool, very awesome, fabulous" ship:

A picture of my room:

When I saw my room when I came home from town, my top bunk was spred as neat as I left it with my pink, shiny comforter.  The stuffed animals were still in the blue toy tub on the floor.  The books were still stacked neatly on the shelf and my shoes were crowded in my closet just as I left them.  My sister's bottom bunk was stuffed with her favorite toys at the end of her bed.  Her pillows were carelessly thrown on the other end.  Her shiny purple comforter was neatly laid on one end and half off of the other.

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Oct. 27, 2007 - Nice!

Posted by SuzyScribbles
I could really see your beds and the closet. I love the words choices you used here: "....my shoes were crowded in my closet just as I left them." Crowded was such a great word!

Oh! I had to edit this, as I originally couldn't see the ship. But when I posted the comment, the picture came through. Thanks for sharing it. I think it is a delightful drawing. You should check out Amy's ship (go to Mr. Linky and click BookLover) and see how it is very different from yours. This will help you see how words like "awesome and very cool" do not really tell you anything about what the ship really looks like.

I will post the "real thing" (AKA the picture of the ship I use in class when I'm trying to "describe" it for the kids to draw.) I use dead words and the kids go crazy trying to figure out what I want them to draw! Every kid's ship looks different and when they see the one I'm describing they all groan! LOL

Edited by SuzyScribbles on Oct. 27, 2007 at 10:36 AM
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Oct. 29, 2007 - Untitled Comment

Posted by BookLover
Hi! I am ten just like you!! Did you see my ship?
AMy
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Nov. 12, 2007 - Untitled Comment

Posted by PrettyPinkPonies
I tagged You!
Marissa
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Jan. 6, 2008 - Bedroom tour

Posted by bigsister
I loved your bedroom tour. It was really neat!
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Jan. 20, 2008 - Hi!

Posted by sunflower8
Want to be friends? I love your blog. I like animals too! I am doing writing lessons with Mrs. Marlow. I love your blog! I am 9
Bethany

Edited by sunflower8 on Jan. 20, 2008 at 7:59 AM
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Jan. 22, 2008 - Untitled Comment

Posted by ALadybug
Good Drawing!
I saw on your mom's blog that you have ALOT of snow! Do you go sledding?
Have a GREAT evening!

God Bless,
Anna
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