"Help!, I'm hit!"
I zoomed toward the surface and crash-landed on the planet. Luke zoomed around me and tried to land,instead he crash-landed too! I looked around and saw stormtroopers rushing toward me! I leaped out of the v-wing and drew my lightsaber."Luke!" I rushed toward the stormtroopers and got one! "LUKE!" I screamed.Then I realized that he must have the exact same thing that happened to me.I was reflecting laser blasts like crazy.
Will I get Home? Wait till chapter 5 | 
Feb. 24, 2009 - Chapter 4
You should start making a habit of making NEW paragraphs (push "enter") when you have dialogue. I think you know this, but you can go back and read your island story to see how I did it when I typed it in for you.
Have fun!
love,
Grandma