Poetic Tragedy

Jun. 3, 2006

Black Rose...What Do You Think?

Ok, sorry it took me so long to post another blog! The thing is I have a notebook that I write my stories in so after I write them in a notebook and then I have to re-type them on the computer and fix mt errors and everything. So, I just wrote a story called "Black Rose". I have a feeling that I cant post it cuz it seems very inapropriate for this site. But I will tell you what its about. Its about this guy named Jon. He's kinda a hopeless romantic. So, one night he runs into this girl named Maria. Jon thinks Maria is the most beautiful girl he has ever seen. They talk for a while and surprisingly they have so much in common. So, Jon, asks Maria out and she accepts. After dating for 3 months Jon goes over to Maria's apartment and gives her this fake red rose. He says to her "A red rose means love. Maria, I love you. But unlike other roses this rose wont die. It will last forever. Just like out love will last forever." That's when Maria realizes that it was the right time to tell Jon the dark secret from her past. Basically her secret was that a couple years back she was dating a man named Paul. Maria wouldnt sleep with Paul so he forced her to. To make it so Maria couldn't call the cops, Paul, locked her in his house for months. He beat her and everything. One day Maria managed to escape and call the police and Paul was arrested. But ever since then Maria had been having nightmares about it and recently stopped. So, after Maria told that to Jon she started crying and Paul held her and told her that everything was gonna be fine. He was wrong. That night Maria started having nightmares again. It was so horrible that she was screaming so loud in her sleep that she woke up the apartment complex. When she woke up she freaked out. She said she couldnt live threw those nightmares again. She opened the bottom drawer of her nighstand and pulled out a dagger. Right before she stabbed herself she saw the rose Jon gave her. She picked it up and said "Jon I love you. I'm so sorry. But this has to be done." Maria took her own life. The next morning Jon found Maria dead in her bedroom. He picked up the rose and strangley the rose started turning black right before his very eyes. He said "This rose is like out love. Its beautiful. But now it is dead." The last sentence in the story is: Jon dropped the rose and walked away...emotionless. Yes, I know very sad. But I'm writing a new story called "A Lovers Revenge" and I'll post that one up here when I'm done writing it! What do you think of this story?

 

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Jun. 4, 2006 - very interesting...

Posted by Songwriter
nice. very interesting. very deep. very emotional. very good. almost brilliantness. perhaps you will inspire my songwriting.

*songwriter*
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Jun. 5, 2006 - Untitled Comment

Posted by BlackRose
hee, when I read the title, I was like...does this have anything to do wiht me. Hey I liked it. Maybe we can E-mail each other our writings? I can't TALK to people I don't know w/ E-mail, but E-mailing out writings should be okay...n one reads my E-mails but me...so what do you think?I can't post all my writings on homeschoolblogger either....and usually I'm too shy lol.
~~Emi
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Jun. 13, 2006 - Untitled Comment

Posted by BrokenRose
I love it!! I love tragety's. There my favorite. I allways write tragety's, that's why I'm so inspired by shakespeare, Although Romeo And Juliet always bored me. I always liked hamlet and Mid-summer Nights Dream, Although nobody dies in Mid-summer Nights Dream. I'm really bored so I'm just rambling.
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Jun. 14, 2006 - Sumthings up...

Posted by TwiggyPop
thats a very good story! I liked it. its deep, emotional, a tragedy with romance. I love it!!!!! AWESOMENESS!!!!! I think BlackRose and Songwriter think we're the same person? I'm assuming its because we both like 24. But I dunno. Kinda funny. Anyways, yeah dats it! Love da story! L8trs!
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Jun. 23, 2006 - Untitled Comment

Posted by DeepBlueSkittle
hmmmm...i like the story. pretty tragic. i'd love to read it, but as you said, it may not be appropriate for homeschoolblogger. so...yea...jaja
i write stories too, usually short books actually, and i'd have to say tragedy is so much more interesting than all those "they lived happily ever after" stories. where all they do is fall in love after one day, get mad at each other over nothing and then get back together and make-out...THE END!
anywho...
i think i will add you to my friends list. just cause.
bye!
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