Poetic Tragedy

Sep. 22, 2006

Dont say "Cheer Up Emo Kid" To Me!

A few things b4 I post my new story. 1st please dont delete my blog if its inapropriate! if it is I'll take it I swear! Also, I took Zee's idea of putting the video on the side. Just so u know I put an Atreyu video their called "The Crimson". It really awesome! I love Atreyu! Anyways, after the story their is a pic of Ian Snyder (a character from Hangman's Curse) and hes sooooooooo sexy! Ok, here's my new story.

 

Haunted

(By Krystal D)

It was a beautiful night. Chloe and her boyfriend Chase where walking through the park, holding hands, and watching the stars. Nothing could be more perfect.

Chloe took a second and looked up at Chase. She was so lucky. Out of all the girls in the world he was with her. The 19 year olds heart melted just thinking about it. She was in love. She was in love with the most perfect man. He was smart, funny, nice, not to mention good looking. Life couldn’t get any better.

They stopped and turned towards each other. Chase took a big breath. This was it. This was the moment. The moment that he would finally ask Chloe to marry him.

Chase starred at her for a while. She was so beautiful! She had a wonderful smile, lovely blue eyes, and long chocolate brown hair. She was the most amazing girl he had ever met. He took another deep breath.

“Chloe,” he began. “Theirs something important I’m about to tell you. I want you to know that nothing could replace you in my heart. I love you. I always have. And I'll never stop loving you. You're my everything!”

He took one more deep breath.

“Basically, what I’m trying to say is…”

Chloe gasped as Chase got down on one knee and showed her a diamond ring.

“Chloe, will you marry me?”

Chloe was in shock.

“Oh my gosh. I don’t know what to say. I just cant believe it.”

She looked at him. He looked so wonderful kneeling their with his gorgeous green eyes and his wavy black hair. She couldn’t believe it. He really loved her! How could she say no?

“Yes. Yes, I’ll marry you!”

Chase jumped up in excitement. He pulled Chloe into his arms as they shared a passionate kiss. He then starred at her delicate face for a long time.

“I love you.” He said almost whispering.

Chloe smiled. “I love you too.”

Chase took her hand and slipped then ring on her finger. It was a perfect fit! They then kissed each other one last time before they went home.

Chloe walked home lost in her thoughts. She couldn’t believe it. Chase proposed! She was going to share the rest of her life with him. ‘Til death do them part! It was an amazing feeling. She had never been so in love with someone before.

“Excuse me!”

Chloe’s thoughts were interrupted.

“Excuse me, miss!”

A man with short black hair and hazel eyes ran up to her.

“Can I help you?” Chloe asked.

The man introduced himself. “Hi, my name is Jeremy. Jerry for short.”

“Hi, I’m Chloe. Nice to meet you.”

“Nice to meet you to. Hey uh listen my new apartment building is called Loving Life apartment complex and I was wondering if you knew where that was?”

“Of course!” Chloe exclaimed. “That’s where I live! I can walk you their. What’s your room number?”

Jerry looked down at his piece of paper. “My room number is…236.”

A shocked expression came across Chloe’s face. “Mine is 237. Guess we’re neighbors.”

Chloe and Jerry talked all the way to the apartment complex. Their was something about Jerry that intrigued Chloe. He was so mysterious and very deep. She liked that about him.

“Would you like to come in for some tea?” Jerry asked her once the reached the complex.

“That sounds nice.” Chloe said following him inside.

The two talked as Jerry made the tea. It turned out that he was an artist. He showed Chloe some of his paintings. They were the most beautiful paintings she had ever seen! In that moment she felt so alive. So inspired to get out and live life to its fullest.

“Your paintings are so beautiful.” She told him.

“Thank you.” Jerry replied. “Come have a seat.”

They sat down on the couch and talked for hours. They talked about music, art, life, and love.

“Oh my goodness!” Chloe said in shock looking down at her watch.

“What is it?” Jerry asked.

“Its three A.M.! I’ve got to get some sleep! I have a big exam tomorrow and I need to be able to focus. I’ll talk to you soon.”

Chloe started making her way to the door when Jerry stopped her.

“Wait!”

He ran up to Chloe, pulled her close, and started kissing her! Chloe put her hand on his face. She had no intention of trying to stop him. When it stopped they stood their staring into each others eyes.

After that moment of silence Jerry whispered “I love you.”

Chloe stood their a moment. She didn’t know how to respond. But she finally said “I love you too.”

He leaned in and they started kissing again.

This time Chloe stopped him. But she stopped him for the wrong reason.

“Its getting late.” She told him as she turned around and headed out.

When she got back to her apartment she looked down at the ring Chase gave her. She gasped as she realized what she had just done. She slid off her bed and onto the floor and started sobbing.

Why did I do it? She thought. I just betrayed the man I love with all my heart. What kind of person am I?

She sat their and cried. But then a thought came to her head. What she did tonight was already horrible. What was to stop it from happening again? If Chase found out he would be crushed! But she felt her feelings for Chase slowly slide away. She didn’t want that to happen! He was the one for her! The perfect man! Yet, new feelings were starting. Feelings for someone else. Feelings for Jerry. She knew those feelings were wrong but they wouldn’t leave! What was she supposed to do?

Chloe crawled into bed. It was now 4 A.M. and it was probably best if she slept on the problem. So she shut out the light and slowly drifted off to sleep.

KNOCK! KNOCK! KNOCK!

Chloe got out of bed and looked at the clock. It was 8 A.M.. She slept to late! Their was no way for her to make it to class on time!

She ran to the door. Who could that be? To her surprise it was Chase!

“Chase!” She said in shock. “What, um…what are you doing here?”

“We’re late for class.” He said. “Are you sick?”

“Um…” Chloe paused for a moment. Was she really gonna lie? “Yeah. Yeah that’s it. I’m uh I’m sick.”

“Chloe I’m sorry. I hope you feel better.” He leaned over and gave her a kiss on the cheek. “I love you.”

Chloe turned her head. She didn’t say anything.

“What’s going on?” Jerry said as he walked out.

“Oh um Chase this is my new next door neighbor Jerry. Jerry this is my fiancé Chase.”

“Nice to meet you dude.” Chase put out his hand to shake but Jerry just stood there.

Jerry stood their for a moment just staring at Chase.

POW!

Jerry punched him hard in the face.

“Look, Chase get out of here.” Jerry told him.

“Dude, what’s up with you?” Chase asked realizing his lip was bloody.

“If you ever see Chloe again…” Jerry pulled a gun from his pocket. “I will kill you.”

Chloe and Chase both stood their stunned.

“Do we have an understanding?” Jerry asked.

“Chloe,” Chase began. “What’s going on?”

Tears welled up in Chloe eyes. “Chase, just go. Do what he says.”

“But, Chloe…” Chase felt his heart breaking. “I love you.”

“Please Chase,” The tears started streaming down her face. “just go.”

Chase couldn’t believe what he was hearing. Then he saw something that made his heart shatter. Chloe was taking off the ring he gave her.

“Now,” Jerry started. “get out of here.”

Chase just stood their.

“NOW!”

Chase left with his whole world torn.

Once Chase was out of site Jerry grabbed Chloe’s wrist and pulled her into his apartment.

“What do you think you were doing?” Jerry asked angrily.

Chloe just stood their crying.

“Do you think this is funny?!” he said throwing her to the ground.

“I didn’t do anything wrong!” Chloe exclaimed.

“What were you doing with him?!”

“He’s my fiancé!”

“Ex-fiancé! You belong to me!”

Chloe couldn’t believe what she was hearing. She didn’t even really get what was happening. This guy was insane! She had made a terrible mistake.

“Oh my gosh!” Chloe exclaimed. “Kill it!”

Jerry turned around real fast and Chloe made a run for the door.

SLAM!

Jerry got their first.

“I’m not that stupid.” He said. “You don’t think that you’ll actually be leaving do you?”

“What do you want from me?” Chloe asked. Her body was trembling. She had never been more scared in her life.

Jerry leaned beside her and whispered things to her. Things that cannot be written. Things that if you knew about would leave you in a state of fear for the rest of your life. Dark things. Things that would leave laying awake at night afraid of having a nightmare. Things that will make you scream if you think about them. Terrible, dark, things.

Chloe started shaking intensely. She didn’t know what to do. She looked up at his face and then it hit her.

“I know who you are.” She said. “Your Jerry Davis. Your on the FBI’s 10 most wanted list.”

“So, you’ve heard of me.” He said.

“You’re the man who likes to torture women for saying it makes you feel good and once your bored of them you…” She stopped. She didn’t want her life to end that way.

“Don’t worry. I’ll make it as painful as possible. Your screams fill me with such inspiration. And your tears, they’re a symbol of beauty.” He told her.

“You’re a sick man!”

Jerry threw her to the ground. He pulled her face toward him and took a knife. He started breathing deep as he started cutting scars into her cheeks. He then pulled down her shirt and cut her back. He also cut her in other places that will not be mentioned.

But that night when Jerry was sleeping Chloe spent five hours looking for the key to unlock the door. She finally found it hidden in an old shampoo bottle in the bathroom. Once she found it she unlocked the door and escaped. She knew she had to hurry because the door creaked very loudly.

Once she was outside she made a run for the car.

Shoot! She thought. The keys are still in my apartment!

She didn’t know what to do.

“Hey!”

She turned around and saw Jerry heading her way.

“Where do you think you’re going?”

Chloe looked over and saw Mr. Garza insert his keys into the ignition. She ran over and pushed him out of the car.

“What on earth are you doing kid?!” Mr. Garza said in shock.

“I’m sorry sir,” Chloe said backing the car out. “but I’m in danger.”

With that she drove off. Their was only one place she could go. It was risky but she knew she had to do it. A few minutes later she arrived at Chase’s house.

Chloe ran up to the door and started ringing the door bell insanely.

“Chase! Please open the door! Chase I’m in danger please help me!”

Chase came to the door. He looked horrible! His eyes were all red, it looked like he hadn’t showered in days!

“What do you want?” Chase asked.

“Chase,” Chloe started crying. “I’m so sorry! Jerry is on the FBI’s most wanted list! He’s why I’m all bloody. He’s so dark. He said…he said…I…”

Chase put his arms around her. “Shh. Its ok. I’m here. Chloe, I’ll take care of you.”

“You will? After everything that’s happened? Even after I hurt you like that? You’ll still do this for me? But why?”

“Because nothing could replace you in my heart. I love you. I always have. And I'll never stop loving you. You're my everything.”

“That’s what you said to me when we…”

“Chloe, its ok. I’m gonna help you.”

Chloe couldn’t believe what she was hearing. After everything that happened he was going to help her!

“Chase, I feel horrible. I mean you’re doing all this and after what I’ve don’t to you and…”

“Chloe, just forget about it. Forgive and forget. I love you.”

Tears welled up in her eyes. He really meant it. He really did love her. How could she have done this to him? After everything he still cares! It was so amazing to her.

“Hey!” Jerry yelled slamming the car door.

“Chase, run. He’ll kill you!” Chloe said in a whisper.

Chase didn’t run. He stayed right beside her.

“I wont leave you. Even if I die I wont leave your side.” Chase said confidently.

“Didn’t I tell you that if you saw her again I would kill you?” Jerry was furious. “Any last words?”

“Chloe, I love you.” Chase said softly.

“Ah…how cute.” And with that Jerry shot Chase three times.

“NO!” Chloe leaned over Chase’s body and cried hysterically.

“The choices you make can be lethal.” Jerry said leaning beside her. “You made some really bad decisions and now you have to live with the consequences forever.”

Chloe just starred at him.

“Let me leave you with this last thought. Never forget those sad moments that haunt you in you dreams because the moments will be apart you forever.”

After that Jerry drove off and was never seen again.

Chloe just sat their. She knew his death was her fault. If she hadn’t gone and did was she had done none of this would have happened. But what Jerry said stuck to her. Never forget those sad moments that haunt you in your dreams because those moments will be apart of you forever. How could she ever forget what happened that day? You only get one chance at love and she blew it. But Chloe had something extra. Every single time she looked into the mirror she would see the scars on her face. Every time she saw them she would remember what happened. Chloe thought maybe she should end it their and now. But life is to short to end it early and not every story can end out with suicide. She decided to live her life alone. She wouldn’t know anybody. And she hoped that when People looked at her they would know what she had done and hate her for it.

This story doesn’t have a happy ending. But not every story can. Not everyone’s life can be a fairytale dream. Chloe’s wasn’t. She had the world and she threw it all away. It will haunt her forever now. The choices you make affect you and the people you love. Those choices will haunt you forever and ever.

The End

 

Yeah, I know. It was sucky. But its what came to mind so I wrote it down. For those of u who have a really short attention span...mostly all my stories are about this long! I'm sorry! Anyways, here's Ian Snyder!

 

He's so hott! I'm going 2 marry him =P. I love him! I'm emo and in the movie he's gothic. I dont know what he is 4 real. I love him either way! Anyways, thats it!

 

~*StoryWriter*~

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Sep. 22, 2006 - Just posted the story...

Posted by BlackRose
May I ask who Ian Snyder is? ummm...Who is Ian Snyder? My computer wouldn't laod the picture of him. Is he the lead singer of AFI? 'Cuz is he is a agree wiht you that he's way hott...
Didn't read your story yet, because I just pushed the "send comment button b4, I read it lol. I'll coment again after I read it...
I just posted the story! Come read it please! I need youre opinion.
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Sep. 22, 2006 - Untitled Comment

Posted by BlackRose
I really loved youre story. And thnx for makeing it short 'cuz I really do have a short attention span. I once read a book, about a girl and she had a boyfriend like the sadistic guy in youre story, the cool thing was, the lady who wrote the book, wrote it from both points of view! the guys and the girls. So it was cool. I wish I could remember what it was called...
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Sep. 22, 2006 - Untitled Comment

Posted by Songwriter
Ok, first off, I have to tell you something, The story was NOT appropriate for this site. And if you had the slightest question whether or not it might be, you probably shouldn't have posted it. My advice would be to delete it. I'm not trying to be mean or anything, I just don't want your blog to be deleted. Ok? And about Ian, he's ok. I'm not in to gothic guys. The picture I saw of him, he looked normal. About you being emo...why?

Songwriter
ps. please don't be mad.
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Sep. 22, 2006 - Untitled Comment

Posted by Songwriter
Well, here's the thing. If your story was a movie, what would it be rated? Like say, the part where you talk about him saying terrible, dark things. And the cutting. and the murder. I don't know. It just didn't seem appropriate. Me and my friend have made up a word. it's eamo. (still pronounced emo.) It means eclectic and modern originality. I'm sorry you cry a lot. But I'm glad you don't cut or anything. Is it cool if I pray for you?

Songwriter <><
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Sep. 23, 2006 - Untitled Comment

Posted by randomchic93
Nah, your story was appropiate. I enjoyed it, you're a good writer!!

Lol that guy is hott!!!

cya
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Sep. 23, 2006 - Untitled Comment

Posted by randomchic93
Nah, your story was appropiate. I enjoyed it, you're a good writer!!

Lol that guy is hott!!!

cya
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Sep. 23, 2006 - Untitled Comment

Posted by soccergal
He is kind of cute but I know some one who thinks the same thing you do. That he is hot not the marrying part. she has her eye set on someone else. How are you doing?
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Sep. 25, 2006 - Untitled Comment

Posted by Ninjirate
that was an awesome story! i liked it! i think i wouldnt know if it was appropriate or not. I love Hangman's Curse! Ian is so sexy! well, if u cal dibs on him then I call Gerard Butler! Hes sexy 2! i like 2 of those quotes in the story they should be icons or something lol. i dunno what i'm saying. I love ur video! Atreyu is 1 of my most fav bands ever! but my fav song of them is Bleeding Mascara. yay!

<3 Ninjirate
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Sep. 25, 2006 - Untitled Comment

Posted by ljcool
THat is such a good story!! YOU LIKE IAN SYNDER!!!! I LOVE HIM!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! I love the book and the movie....of course...HE'S MY FAV CHARACTER!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!


I'm so glad that you would like to hear my story!!! One question about Yahoo is...where do you go to download it???
until later
cya, lauren
p.s. I LOVE IAN SNYDER!!!!!!!!!!!!!
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Sep. 25, 2006 - Untitled Comment

Posted by BlackRose
I read the book hangmans curse! It was a really good book! I haven't seen the movie, althought lots of people have reccomended I watch it. If I don't rent "ice age 2" tonight I think I'll get it.
Thank for the advice about the story! I don't think I'll continue it though, because I kind of got stuck at the end, and barely was even able to finish it, that happens sometimes...
Right now I'm reading a book called "Tenderness" I don't know if you read books alot or not, but this one is real good, and it reminds me alot of youre writing.
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Sep. 26, 2006 - Untitled Comment

Posted by Songwriter
Yah, I hate it when people judge me by what I wear and stuff. I got pretty ticked one time when my friends were all "black nails are evil" and, whatdoyaknow, I walk in the next week with black nails. I didn't change, but my appearance did. I was the same person. needless to say, I proved my point. That was two years ago. I usually wear black nails now, cept when I play basketball, cause at our co-op they don't like that. Yeah, it would depend on what you showed. I mean, I said it might not be appropriate for THIS SITE. I didn't mean like, unappropriate at all.

Songwriter <><
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Sep. 29, 2006 - Untitled Comment

Posted by BlackRose
I watched the Hangmans Curse. You are right that Ian was hot. My mom thinks that the dad of Elija is hot. She's wierd. I guess I can see how she thinks that though....I didn't like the ending that much...I think I liked the book better...
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Oct. 2, 2006 - <i>Untitled Comment</i>

Posted by
I loved your story so much! It was awesomfull, Are you done reading that one book yet cuz you really need to read Wuthering Heights, I keep telling my other two friends emily and rachel to read it but they won't! Yeah they both annoy me
( *Wink wink*). Lol, I think your story is fine, really I think it is the most stupedest thing in the world for anyone to think it's not!! It's your blog, not theyre's.

-Note to the Adminestrator - Stop deleting peoples blogs! if there is somthing on there someone dosn't like they don't have to read it. Heck people should be aloud to cuss if they want, I wouldn't, and I wouldn't read anyones blog who did, but that's okay cuz it's they're blog. Why does it matter what you think, I think, or what anyone else thinks!?!?

Back to storywriter, sorry i'm rambling. I just get so annoyed at that. That's prolly why I'm gonna get a myspace. Oh well ttyl!

~Root

Edited by BrokenRose on Oct. 2, 2006 at 6:50 PM
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Oct. 11, 2006 - Untitled Comment

Posted by BrokenRose
Hey I wrote a story on my blog, I want to know what you think, plaese tell me the truth. I know that your good at writing storys so I want to see if you like mine.

~Root
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Oct. 13, 2006 - Untitled Comment

Posted by soccergal
LOVE YOUR DAVEY PICTURE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
WE THINK HE IS HOTTT..
SINCERELY AND ALWAYS,
CRAZY AND XTRIPANDFALL (SCOUT)
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Oct. 17, 2006 - Untitled Comment

Posted by ljcool
I'm glad you scrolled down to read my story...not many people would do that. I'm glad you think i'm a good writer!!
until later
cya, lauren
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