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A Writers Thoughts
Dec. 28, 2007 - lesson 13

I am going to pretend that I am a gold nugget durring the gold rush....A big hand has just reached down and picked me from the stream.

I was busy admiring my reflection on a shining, smooth stone when a shadow was cast over me.

I thought many things at once of which I was not afraid, such as, fish, bird or duck, or perhaps a fisherman.

But, alas! None of my assumptions were correct! A large, rough, bear-like hand was enclosing me in a tight and suffocating grasp.

After a moment of swirling around for what seemed like ages there was a loud shout of sheer joy,

'Matthew, Jonas! We is gonna be rich! This here stream is teaming with gold as well as trout!'

I was held up for all to see. I felt quite exposed in the bright sunlight and wished to be buried in the wet, muddy sand at the bottom of the stream.

But, I should have wished no such thing for in a moment, I was shut up in a cloth bag with no room about me. And so I am decidedly against whatever it is that caused me to leave my lovely, shimmering home.

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Dec. 28, 2007 - Wonderful!
Posted by SuzyScribbles
"A tight and suffocating grasp," "rough, bear-like" hand;
Nice word choices. I like it!!!
I also like how you included dialogue here. It kept me gripped.
Short, beginning, middle and (sort of) ending. You left me on a cliff-hanger! What happens to you (gold nugget) now? LOl
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Dec. 28, 2007 - Question
Posted by SuzyScribbles
Are you having any trouble downloading and printing out the worksheets?
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Dec. 29, 2007 - No.....
Posted by Brenna13
I am not having trouble.....I am just working out of my own notebook.......I am glad that you like it! What do I do next? (Work more on my story so you can read it right?) :-)
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Jan. 8, 2008 - Awsom
Posted by bigsister
Hey, that's awsome! I agree with Suzy, nice choice of words. Also, I like how the nugget is "busy admiring his reflection" describes a gold nugget perfectly!

Edited by Brenna13 on Jan. 8, 2008 at 4:31 PM
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