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Aug. 30, 2007

cummings-esque

My literature assignment was to write a "cummings-esque" poem, so this is what I came up with. Inspired by driving through the Virginia and West Virginia mountains.

clouds. . .
     floating
       in
         space. . .

~~shapeless~~and~~formeless~~
          ~~empty~~and~~void~~

is that a     cloud     on earth?
a spectre of the
                           heavens?

hovering
                     over
                                               the
                                  surface
                         of
               the
bridge.

                                                          we're driving through a cloud!
                                        a cloud of foggy mist-ish rain, laden with droplets
                                                                       of a silver-grey-ish hue

Now :) Tell me if you can guess why I spaced (or did not space) the words like I did, please!

Original composition, August 2007.

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Aug. 31, 2007 - I know! I know! I know!

Posted by msmarla

Because the words and their spacing (and font colors) help to conjure up the image you are sharing. I could definitely "see" them.

Very nicely done.

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Sep. 28, 2007 - My Guess...

Posted by ChristsInstrument

Well, it sort of looks like a big, poofy cloud above, with the car driving through underneath. :D

God bless,
Sheila

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