Hope awoke from the dream to find herself shivering. For a moment she was frightened, not sure of where she was. But as she glanced around she was reassured to be in her own bed. "Was it really only a few months ago?" she wondered silently. A soft smile lit her face as a warn tongue licked her arm. "Alright Tagg," she said to the little terrier resting at her side, "I'll feed you in just a few minutes." Rising from bed, Hope went to her bureau and took out a simple blue linen dress. While changing out of her night-shift, she looked around her room again. It was decorated in many shades of yellow. The curtains were the bright yellow of a fresh, spring dandelion. The quilted bedspread on her bed was a softer shad, but no less cheerful. Her favorite part of the room, were two windows next to her bed. Out of them she could see far across the praires of Wisconsin. Minutes later, Hope skipped down the stairs, where she sat down with a piece of homemade bread spread with freshly churned butter. Careful not to forget about Tagg, she fed him pieces of dried meat from the pantry. After breakfast, she softly crept out to the porch, careful not to wake anyone else in the house. She sat down in an oak rocking chair and watched as the sun slowly began to rise. She looked out over the prairie and a smile once again touched her face as she thought back to a similar time. *Three year old Hope sat on the porch with her mother on her right and her father on her left. Placing a chubby hand in each of theirs, she delighted them with a smile. * This, one of Hope's few happy memories would always be cherished in her heart. Then, her smile turned to a frown as she thought of a time that was not as happy for her. *Hope tryed to pull herself from the older boy's grasp, but could not. He yanked her up by her arm onto his horse and galloped back towards the little cabin that served as her home. * Well, there's the first part. I actually have more written, but I think I'll see what you think of it and keep you in suspense before writing more;-) Please let me know what you think!
Comments
Dec. 8, 2008 - Untitled Comment
Posted by alizona
I like it! It's a good opening. It puts lots of questions in the reader's mind, like who does Hope live with (if anyone), what is the story behind her, etc. It will be great to read more! I would just suggest that perhaps you could mention Hope's age and introduce her a little more (of course, that all might be coming up later, and it might be better there, you know best!).
Keep up the writing!
Alison
Dec. 9, 2008 - hey
Posted by aliveagain13
I love it!!! LOL I love the name of the dog :P
I love ya
Katy <3
Aug. 2, 2009 - Untitled Comment
Posted by Arwen95
I really liked that!!!!!!!
Arwen