My Stories - Writing Workshop Lesson 7-a

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Oct. 17, 2007
Writing Workshop Lesson 7-a

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My work is in red.

 

1) Without looking back, name the 5 elements of a good story.
Character, setting, problem, plot, and a solution.

2) Choose a book and pick out the 5 elements of the story. (Don't forget to name the book. And you can't use the one you've already done!)
Charlotte’s Web:
Character: Charlotte and Wilbur
Setting: Barnyard
Problem: Wilbur is going to be killed for christmas dinner.
Plot: Charlotte has to come up with a plan to save Wilbur’s life.
Solution: Charlotte saves Wilbur’s life by making him looking magnificent and smart.

 
3) OK. I'm going to list some physical and personality traits of a character (I won't say if it's a girl or a boy. That's your decision). You take those traits and turn them into a nicely written paragraph (a character sketch). You decide if it's a hero or bad guy. Name the character and give him/her some life! Don't just put the traits in a long, boring sentence.

Physical: hazel eyes; thin lips and sparkling teeth; ears stick out a little bit; short, curly red hair that sticks up all over the place; sunburns easily.

Personality: loyal; patient with friends, but unforgiving with enemies; truthful most of the time but afraid of getting in trouble so an occasional lie slips out; insecure and wants friends; talks too much; very creative.

Olivia Oregno is extremely bossy! If she doesn’t get her way, you can be sure that she will find her mom and tell. She is big tattletale too, so she doesn’t have many friends. Another reason she doesn’t have many friends is because she often lies when she is in trouble because she doesn’t want to be punished, and her family says that trouble follows her around. She is also a big gossiper.
Though I have lots of bad things to tell you about Olivia, there are a few good things.
She works hard at her school, and when she is asked to do something, it is done very well. Olivia is very creative and she is often coming up with inventions that help make her chores easier! Such as the remote control for the vacuum. And, a robot that she could program to do her chores for her. The only problem with the robot is that her mom wasn’t too happy with it because Olivia wasn’t doing anything except learning how to be lazy!
Olivia’s only friend that she is loyal to is the girl across the street who helps her with the inventions.

4) Now I'm going to write some little scenes and you have to guess what feeling my character is showing. You may use your chart of character feelings if you need to. I'll be taking all my examples from that chart. Good luck!

4A) When Andrew opened the door, his mouth dropped open. His eyes opened wide and he gasped. What in the world? He thought. A spider the size of his hand skittered toward him. Andrew jumped back and clapped a hand over his mouth. Shocked and scared.

4B) Not another one, Sarah said to herself as the teacher passed out the test. It's so easy. She yawned and propped her head in her hand. Why can't he give me a test that challenges me? Sarah rubbed her eyes and slouched. With a sigh, she picked up her pencil and began scribbling in her answers. Bored.

4C) Tina's heart pounded against the inside of her chest as she balanced on the edge of the cliff. Eyes wide, she glanced down at the turquoise water 40 feet below. Her whole body trembled. Her breath came in small gasps. I can do this! She told herself. Hands shaking, she closed her eyes, plugged her nose, and leaped from the cliff. Really scared and nervous.

5) Here are 3 pictures to choose from. Choose one, copy it onto your blog, and take a "word picture" of it with your writing camera. Don't just list describing words but put some thought into it. Be creative! Most of all, I want to be able to "see" this picture when I read your paragraph.

 

 

I picked this one:

In the middle of a sidewalk, where the road took a turn, stood a little girl in a yellow coat and hat. Tall buildings surrounded her, and the sky was a hazy blue. It was quite a strange sight, because she was looking towards the butcher shop where a lady was walking towards her. That wasn’t the strange thing. The strange part was that the girl was holding a package of ground beef, wrapped in paper, and she was eating it!
Once the lady saw what the girl was doing, she quickly ran towards her, and exclaimed:
“Grace! Don’t eat that. It could make you sick!” and gently pulled the package of meat out of the girl's hand.
“But Mommy, I was hungry, and it looked like a big candy bar!” was the little girls reply. The mother chuckled to herself, took the girl’s hand, and they walked off down the street.
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Dec. 28, 2007 - Untitled Comment

Posted by SuzyScribbles
I can't believe the quality of work that I receive from you, Amy. It is always "top of the line" and a joy to read and give feedback on. Truly God has gifted you with a writing talent. You score 100% on every category except the one where you are to write the character sketch. Actually I LOVED learning about Olivia, but you didn't incorporate any of her physical features into the sketch (which was part of the assignment, so a small mention would have been good). Other than that, you did an amazing job of showing me this totally fascinating character and now....perhaps you can come up with a short story about her for your story blog, about her many, many creative inventions! Super. I would score this sketch as a 99%!
I guess I'd better get going on lesson 8, right? :-)
oops! I forgot to mention that the word picture you took with your writing camera of the girl is so funny, descriptive, and a hoot! I laughed! Nice job.
I think I might e-mail you some places where you can enter contests for kids. Writers Digest has a monthly contest, and you can win gift certificates for bookstores and stuff. Look for an e-mail from me shortly!
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