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Oct. 17, 2007
Writing Workshop Lesson 9
This week I was supposed to change this sentence to something that would "hook" people's intrest:
One Sunny day Hannah and Harry went to the beach and discovered a lifeboat washed up on shore.
Here is what I wrote:
This place was strange. The leaves were black, the grass was orange and the birds were all making moaning sounds. It was a creepy beach. Hannah and Harry stomped through it anyways. They were on a mission and they were determined to finish what they had started.
“Look at that!” exclaimed Hannah and pointed towards the trees. There lay a half buried, muddy, old abandoned lifeboat! All the sudden, the leaves on it started to move.
And here is another one:
“Hannah, do you see what I see? It’s an old lifeboat!” exclaimed Harry excitedly. Both children were eager to see if it would still work so they started to push it into the water when suddenly they heard footsteps that sounded like thunder!
“What do you think you are doing with my boat?” boomed the giant. Both children ran. |
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Dec. 28, 2007 - Untitled Comment
Very good!