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Jan. 11, 2008
Writing Workshop Lesson 16
This will be the last lesson!!! To see all the other ones, click on "Writing Lessons" on my left sidebar.
Doris the cat purred happily and curled up in the sunny window. She shivered a little when she thought about how long she'd lived in the streets as a skinny, stray cat. But that was then. Now she knew she would never again choose to wander about chasing mice like she used to. It would be fancy cat food for her from now on, served in a fancy glass dish. As old Mrs. Winn patted her soft coat, Doris stretched and hoped that life would always be this good!
--(From The Most Wonderful Writing Lessons Ever by Barbara Mariconda)
Before: And that is the story of how I saved my little sister from drowning.
A memory?: How cold the water was.
A feeling?: Love towards my sister.
A hope?: That I would never have to jump into icy at night ever again. Especially to save my sister from drowning.
A decision?: That I would try to set a good example to my sister, and watch out for her always.
Revised ending: As I lay in bed trying to get warm, I felt a surge of love towards my sister as I remembered how the night had played out. That afternoon, I had jumped into the river off of a tree branch with a few of my friends. Then after supper, my sister had climbed the tree and jumped in to except she couldn’t swim. I had climbed the tree and jumped in to save her. The thing I remembered the most was how cold the water was. I hoped that I would never have to jump into icy water at night ever again. Especially to save my sister from drowning! And I decided that I would try to set a good example to my sister, and watch out for her always |
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Jan. 11, 2008 - Ending with a Bang!
I shall try and put together a special certificate for you. I've played around with a couple designs, but I don't like them! I want my Reach for the Stars certificates to be very cool and official looking.
And now, alas, I have bad news. I have jury duty next week--at least Monday and probably Tuesday. I can bring my laptop so hopefully I can blog and try to work on my template (I'll fill up my laptop with helpful things, I hope, before I go). But I fear it will be a long, boring day. Thinking about jury duty will not let my mind think too much about any of my blog designs. I had prayed that God would decide (it's random numbers) and last week He gave me a week of grace, since I had to finish some book stuff. But this week I guess He figures I need to be in Seattle. Metro busses, here I come. *big sigh*
Edited by skmarlow on Jan. 11, 2008 at 11:01 PM