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Jan. 11, 2008 Writing Workshop Lesson 16
This will be the last lesson!!! To see all the other ones, click on "Writing Lessons" on my left sidebar.
Doris the cat purred happily and curled up in the sunny window. She shivered a little when she thought about how long she'd lived in the streets as a skinny, stray cat. But that was then. Now she knew she would never again choose to wander about chasing mice like she used to. It would be fancy cat food for her from now on, served in a fancy glass dish. As old Mrs. Winn patted her soft coat, Doris stretched and hoped that life would always be this good!
--(From The Most Wonderful Writing Lessons Ever by Barbara Mariconda)
Before: And that is the story of how I saved my little sister from drowning.
A memory?: How cold the water was.
A feeling?: Love towards my sister.
A hope?: That I would never have to jump into icy at night ever again. Especially to save my sister from drowning.
A decision?: That I would try to set a good example to my sister, and watch out for her always.
Revised ending: As I lay in bed trying to get warm, I felt a surge of love towards my sister as I remembered how the night had played out. That afternoon, I had jumped into the river off of a tree branch with a few of my friends. Then after supper, my sister had climbed the tree and jumped in to except she couldn’t swim. I had climbed the tree and jumped in to save her. The thing I remembered the most was how cold the water was. I hoped that I would never have to jump into icy water at night ever again. Especially to save my sister from drowning! And I decided that I would try to set a good example to my sister, and watch out for her always |
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Jan. 10, 2008 Writing Workshop Lesson 15
Title: Joseph of Genesis
Nutshell Summary: The story of how Joseph trusts God through his trials.
Hook: Joseph is Jacob’s favorite son and he gives him a coat of many colors.
Problem (first “down”): Joseph’s brothers were jealous of him and they sold him to a passing caravan, who later on sells him to the Egyptians.
Up: Potiphar makes Joseph the overseer of the house.
Down: Potiphar’s wife tells a lie about Joseph and he is thrown in the prison.
Up: Even though Joseph is one of the prisoners, he is given charge over all the other prisoners.
Down: The chief butler forgets to tell Pharaoh about Joseph.
Up: Pharaoh has a dream and the chief butler remembers how Joseph interpreted it and Joseph is let out of prison.
Down: There is a famine in the land.
Up: Joseph is put in charge of all the food.
CLIMAX (darkest moment): Joseph tells his brothers that they are spies and he is going to keep them all in prison.
Resolution: Joseph’s brothers return with Benjamin.
Satisfying Ending: Joseph’s family comes to live in Egypt for the rest of the famine. |
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Jan. 4, 2008 Writing Workshop Lesson 14
Nutshell Summary:
Josh and his friends ride the rapids in a leaky raft and survive.
Scene:
“They’re after us!” shouted Josh. “Can’t we row any faster?” The natives of Piura, a jungle on the coast of South America were chasing them down the Amazon river.
Josh and his friends had found a raft tangled in the bushes on the shore. The only problem was that it was leaky. The natives had a strong wooden canoe and were gaining on the children!
“Were paddling as fast as we can!” yelled Mathew. “Look up ahead. There are the rapids that dad warned us about. We can’t get through them!” Mary took a break from blowing up the raft and looked for the rapids. Her cheeks were as red as a ripe tomato. She had been given the job of trying to blow up the raft as they went along.
“Do you need help rowing?” she asked.
“No, we can do it. You need to get back to your blowing or we are going to sink!” answered Josh. “We might anyway with these rapids,” he added under his breath.
Just then the raft snagged on a rock, and lost all its air. The raft went under the foaming water never to be seen again. All the kids went under too!
Josh managed to fight his way back up to the surface and grab a rock for support. So did Mathew. They both looked franticly around for Mary. Suddenly Josh saw her dress swirl up to the surface. Josh dived under the water and grabbed Mary’s skirt.
Just then Mathew remembered why they had been in the raft in the first place: the natives were after him! He glanced back and to his horror, they were almost 5 yards away but they were having trouble getting the canoe through the rocks.
When Josh came up with Mary, they huddled together on the rock trying to catch their breath before moving on. Just then, Mary saw the natives canoe tip over and all of the men spill out! Now that the canoe had no one in it, it just went along with the water. When it reached the children, Josh jumped in pulling Mary along, and motioned to Mathew to do the same.
“We can’t just leave them there in the water!” exclaimed Mary starting to climb out of the boat. Mathew jerked her back in by her skirt.
“You can’t go back there and help them! We’ve got to get away. Plus they live here. They should be able to save themselves.” Mathew was right. From their spot in the canoe which was jammed in between two rocks, they could see very well. The natives were swimming towards shore! It didn’t take them long to reach it. Mary started to get out of the canoe again.
“What are you doing now?” asked Josh. “You aren’t going to swim to shore too are you?”
“No, I am going to get this canoe unstuck!” The boys quickly hopped out too, and helped her. Then they got back in and pushed off the rocks to steer themselves. Soon they reached calmer waters, and by paddling with their hands, they slowly made their way back to land. |
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Jan. 4, 2008 Writing Workshop Lesson 13
Every day I lay in the stream waiting for the man to find me. He spent hours searching but only got gold dust. His wife had tried too, but the searches were all in vain.
One day, as I was rocked back and forth by the tiny waves, I saw the little boy coming towards my part of the stream. He sat down a few inches away from me and started to dig through the dirt, imitating his father and mother. Suddenly, his chubby hand reached down and grabbed me! It was the most frightening experience I had ever gone through! I could no longer see the glorious sunlight I had learned to love. I no longer felt free like I had in my cool bed of rocks. This chubby hand was hot, and dark! Then, the boy opened his hand and I could see the warm sun again. I wasn’t so scared then. I could hear the boy mumbling something about how beautiful I was and then we got up and jiggled and jolted and bumped and jumped along until he reached his parents.
“Mommy look at the pretty rock I found!” I heard the boy say. Then there was a lot of commotion and I couldn’t tell what anybody was saying. There were shouts of excitement, more jiggling and jostling, and then more shouts of excitement. Once they quieted down a little, I heard the dad say something about how he couldn’t believe that his four-year-old boy had found a huge chunk of gold, when he himself had been searching for days! The sun disappeared again for a long, long time. |
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Oct. 17, 2007 Writing Workshop Lesson 12
I am not explaining what this was for, so you can wonder what this is about all you want!:-)
“Batter-up! We haven’t got all day!” Tom shouted.
“Stop yelling,” Katie said. She grabbed the bat and scowled at her brother. He scowled back.
“No girls,” Sean piped up from the pitcher’s mound.
“What do you care? She’s not on your team,” Tom snapped. Sean glared at Katie for a moment, then shrugged.
“Suit yourself. But I’m not going easy on her just ’cause she’s a girl.”
“Who’s asking you to?” Katie said. “Play ball!” |
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Oct. 17, 2007 Writing Workshop Lesson 10-11
Title: The Swiss Family Robinson
Nutshell Summary: This book is the story of a family that is shipwrecked on an island. It tells about how they survived using only the things they had brought with them from the boat, and everything on the island.
Title: Barney Hits the Trail
Nutshell Summary: Barney Hits The Trail is a book about a boy’s adventures for a year in Alaska.
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Oct. 17, 2007 Writing Workshop Lesson 9
This week I was supposed to change this sentence to something that would "hook" people's intrest:
One Sunny day Hannah and Harry went to the beach and discovered a lifeboat washed up on shore.
Here is what I wrote:
This place was strange. The leaves were black, the grass was orange and the birds were all making moaning sounds. It was a creepy beach. Hannah and Harry stomped through it anyways. They were on a mission and they were determined to finish what they had started.
“Look at that!” exclaimed Hannah and pointed towards the trees. There lay a half buried, muddy, old abandoned lifeboat! All the sudden, the leaves on it started to move.
And here is another one:
“Hannah, do you see what I see? It’s an old lifeboat!” exclaimed Harry excitedly. Both children were eager to see if it would still work so they started to push it into the water when suddenly they heard footsteps that sounded like thunder!
“What do you think you are doing with my boat?” boomed the giant. Both children ran. |
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Oct. 17, 2007 Writing Workshop Lesson 8
Character: Nicole Peterson
Setting: Lying on a sandy beach
The sound of the waves was beautiful to listen too! Nicole shut her eyes and wished she could go to sleep. Suddenly, she felt a horrid pain in her big toe! Nicole jumped up and to her horror, she saw a crab as big as a pie pan pinching her toe! Without thinking that the crab might get her again, she reached down and tried to get her toe free but instead, the crab pinched her fingers too!
“Help me!” she cried. Just then a teenager came by and saw Nicole’s trouble!
“You need help? I’ll help you,” he said. The boy pulled something out of his pocket and sprinkled it all over her stomach. The crab came and crawled after it! It was crab food!
“You go away!!! Help!!!!” screamed Nicole.
“Wake up Nicole. Wake up,” said Jane, Nicole’s older sister.
There you go! |
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Oct. 17, 2007 Writing Workshop Lesson 7-a
My work is in red.
1) Without looking back, name the 5 elements of a good story.
Character, setting, problem, plot, and a solution.
2) Choose a book and pick out the 5 elements of the story. (Don't forget to name the book. And you can't use the one you've already done!)
Charlotte’s Web:
Character: Charlotte and Wilbur
Setting: Barnyard
Problem: Wilbur is going to be killed for christmas dinner.
Plot: Charlotte has to come up with a plan to save Wilbur’s life.
Solution: Charlotte saves Wilbur’s life by making him looking magnificent and smart.
3) OK. I'm going to list some physical and personality traits of a character (I won't say if it's a girl or a boy. That's your decision). You take those traits and turn them into a nicely written paragraph (a character sketch). You decide if it's a hero or bad guy. Name the character and give him/her some life! Don't just put the traits in a long, boring sentence.
Physical: hazel eyes; thin lips and sparkling teeth; ears stick out a little bit; short, curly red hair that sticks up all over the place; sunburns easily.
Personality: loyal; patient with friends, but unforgiving with enemies; truthful most of the time but afraid of getting in trouble so an occasional lie slips out; insecure and wants friends; talks too much; very creative.
Olivia Oregno is extremely bossy! If she doesn’t get her way, you can be sure that she will find her mom and tell. She is big tattletale too, so she doesn’t have many friends. Another reason she doesn’t have many friends is because she often lies when she is in trouble because she doesn’t want to be punished, and her family says that trouble follows her around. She is also a big gossiper.
Though I have lots of bad things to tell you about Olivia, there are a few good things.
She works hard at her school, and when she is asked to do something, it is done very well. Olivia is very creative and she is often coming up with inventions that help make her chores easier! Such as the remote control for the vacuum. And, a robot that she could program to do her chores for her. The only problem with the robot is that her mom wasn’t too happy with it because Olivia wasn’t doing anything except learning how to be lazy!
Olivia’s only friend that she is loyal to is the girl across the street who helps her with the inventions.
4) Now I'm going to write some little scenes and you have to guess what feeling my character is showing. You may use your chart of character feelings if you need to. I'll be taking all my examples from that chart. Good luck!
4A) When Andrew opened the door, his mouth dropped open. His eyes opened wide and he gasped. What in the world? He thought. A spider the size of his hand skittered toward him. Andrew jumped back and clapped a hand over his mouth. Shocked and scared.
4B) Not another one, Sarah said to herself as the teacher passed out the test. It's so easy. She yawned and propped her head in her hand. Why can't he give me a test that challenges me? Sarah rubbed her eyes and slouched. With a sigh, she picked up her pencil and began scribbling in her answers. Bored.
4C) Tina's heart pounded against the inside of her chest as she balanced on the edge of the cliff. Eyes wide, she glanced down at the turquoise water 40 feet below. Her whole body trembled. Her breath came in small gasps. I can do this! She told herself. Hands shaking, she closed her eyes, plugged her nose, and leaped from the cliff. Really scared and nervous.
5) Here are 3 pictures to choose from. Choose one, copy it onto your blog, and take a "word picture" of it with your writing camera. Don't just list describing words but put some thought into it. Be creative! Most of all, I want to be able to "see" this picture when I read your paragraph.
I picked this one:
In the middle of a sidewalk, where the road took a turn, stood a little girl in a yellow coat and hat. Tall buildings surrounded her, and the sky was a hazy blue. It was quite a strange sight, because she was looking towards the butcher shop where a lady was walking towards her. That wasn’t the strange thing. The strange part was that the girl was holding a package of ground beef, wrapped in paper, and she was eating it!
Once the lady saw what the girl was doing, she quickly ran towards her, and exclaimed:
“Grace! Don’t eat that. It could make you sick!” and gently pulled the package of meat out of the girl's hand.
“But Mommy, I was hungry, and it looked like a big candy bar!” was the little girls reply. The mother chuckled to herself, took the girl’s hand, and they walked off down the street. |
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Oct. 17, 2007 Writing Workshop Lesson 7
Lesson 7:
Before: It rained all week during our camping trip.
After: All week, we had to sit in our tents with nothing to do and listen to the patter of the rain on the tent roof continually! It was so bad that I never want to go camping again!
Before: Katie saw a scary sea creature at the aquarium.
After: Katie went to the aquarium and saw this sea creature that gave her the shivers! It was dark red with orange spots on its back. It was about five feet long, and it had triangular bumps on it face. It made a low-pitched moan when it was mad. Katie had to plug her nose because it smelled horrid! Katie would describe it as the smell of rotten eggs.
Before: As I entered the cave, I found the object of my search-the lost treasure chest of the Ancients!
After: When I stepped into the cave, my eyes had to adjust to the dark but when they did, I saw the treasure chest that I had labored so hard to find! It was rusty brown, but when I opened it, I was blinded by the color of the gold! Inside there was diamonds and jewels, gold, silver that gleaned so bright it was blinding! When I got to the bottom, I found a map to another treasure on the island! I was so excited that I ran out of the cave and called to my team to help me sort through it all.
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Oct. 17, 2007 Writing Workshop Lesson 6
The pictures that we drew don’t all look alike because we all have our own ideas and we get different pictures in our mind.
Here are my "dead" words:
Ugly, mad, windy, cloudy, clean.
A Tour of the Family Room/School Room/Play Room/Computer Room/Sewing Room
You walk in from the dining room, and see a huge mess! There is a table in the middle of the room that has crayons, books, tape, and paper all scattered on it. Then in the far left corner you see a table that is the sewing table. This table has stuff piled a mile high! There are two sewing machines on it. Only one of them is set up. The side of the table closest to the dining room has a magazine about the moon sitting on it, buttons, thread, lace, patterns, and pins scattered all over the place. On the other side of the table, there are hats, plastic bags, my quilt that I am making, two sewing boxes, cotton stuffing, and even pizza boxes!! (They are filled with quilt blocks.) As you can tell this table is an absolute disaster!
Along one of the walls sits my desk. (I don’t really want to tell you how messy it is!!)
It has plastic containers, cardboard boxes, schoolbooks, and toys all piled up on it. If you bump into it, you might just get buried in junk!!!
Right by my desk, there is a set of cupboards. They have a plastic crate on top of them with schoolbooks in it. (Most of the books are on the cupboard and not in the crate!!) There are dollhouses, and a lego box that has wooden blocks in it, a box full of the legos, and a set of drawers, all sitting on top. Another dangerous place to be by!
The walls are covered by the planets, a world map, the United States map, a bible verse poster, my artwork, pictures of my pen-pals, a small square quilt, more of my artwork, the presidents, my grandma’s artwork, my sister’s artwork!
That is about all that there is to tell about, except for the mess on the floor. That can be overlooked for now.
Amy
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Oct. 17, 2007 Writing Workshop Lesson 5
Lesson 5:
Character: Madeline Brown
Emotion: Nervous
Wringing her hands, she walked up to the stage. She couldn't get up in front of all those people! She bit her lip, shuffling her feet so it would take along time to get there. Her stomach felt like it had butterflies flying all around inside. Her heart pounded so hard it felt like it would jump out. She swallowed hard, bit her lip, stumbled up the stairs, and then clenched her fist, and pretended to be brave. All the people were looking right at her! She took a deep breath, tried to start her speech, and then, she fainted! |
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Oct. 17, 2007 Writing Workshop Lesson 4
Lesson 4:
Madeline Brown is a ten-year-old girl who lives in the Montana country side. With her long dark brown hair, and bright blue eyes, when sitting on her horse Firedance, she makes a beautiful picture. Maddie loves to ride Firedance around the ranch, and sometimes she even rides to the lake that borders their property, and paints pictures of Firedance.
Since Maddie has chores to do around the farm, she often braids her hair down her back, and then she is free to go.
She loves to cook, and so she often helps the maid Joy in the kitchen.
When sent off to school she gets to ride Firedance. In school, she doesn’t do her best in anything except math. In science, Maddie can hardly keep her mind on the lesson. She claims that science bores her to death.
When she grows up, Maddie wants to be a chef, an author, and a horse breeder.
The only sibling that Maddie has is a five-year-old girl named Sofia. Sofia likes to tag along with Maddie everywhere! Sometimes it annoys Maddie, and she loses her temper but she tries hard to spend a lot of time with her sister and set a good example. |
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Oct. 17, 2007 Writing Workshop Lesson 3
Lesson 3:
Character: Madeline Brown
Physical traits: Waist long brown hair, freckled face, bright blue eyes, glasses, white shining teeth
Personality Traits: Bold, honest, doesn’t always put a lot of effort into everything, honest, adventurous,
Likes/Dislikes: Likes to read, likes to play the flute and piano, likes math, doesn’t like to bike, doesn’t like science, doesn’t like sewing |
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Oct. 17, 2007 Writing Workshop Lesson 2
Lesson 2:
Misty’s Twilight, by Margurite Henry
My favorite character is Kathy Daley, because she is kind to Misty, and she tries to help Sandy find something for Misty to
learn.
My least favorite character is Chris, because he doesn’t seem to like horses, and is more interested in his boas that anything
else.
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Oct. 17, 2007 Writing Workshop Lesson 1
I hadn't been doing the assinments, and now since I started, I am going to post the first three all at once, and then I will catch up on the others later:
Lesson 1:
Tip Lewis and His Lamp
Character: Tip Lewis
Setting: 1800 Eastern USA
Problem: He wants to do right, but all the kids at school bully him, and tease him making it hard to do what is right.
Plot: Tip came from an ungodly home, and finds his way with light from his lamp, the Bible.
Solution: He stood up for what he believed, and then the kids at school quit teasing him because they realized he was serious.
Well, That is all for now!!! Oh, also if you are going to do this, go to www.homeschoolblogger.com/writingworkshop
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