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Feb. 4, 2008 - Lesson 6 of Writing Workshop

This is writing lesson 6. This lesson is about not using "dead" words. It means that books aren't  interesting if we use "dead" words. Here are some "dead" words: Neat, really, funny, scary, delicious, cute, messy, very, awesome, big, gorgeous, beautiful, pretty, nice, great, cool, wonderful, awful, fantastic, bad, good, dirty, boring. Of course we need to use "dead" words sometimes but not all the time. Here is a picture of my "really cool, very awesome, fabulous" ship. This is what it says on my third piece of paper for an example of how her room looked like instead of saying, her room was messy. Her room was exactly how she had left it- the bed unmade, yesterday's school clothes hanging carelessly over a chair, and her nightgown lying in a heap on the floor. Books and papers lay atop her chest of drawers, with stood open. A dusty saddle blanket lay discarded in a corner, completed the unappealing scene. So this is what I did. In my bedroom my pink fluffy slippers lie beside my bed. Our key-board sits in the corner and my drawers are next to it.On the wall,my books stay in my 3 book shelfs. And on my drawers sits my doll-house with my purple-pink CD player. Well, what did you think? To do writing lessons with Mrs. Marlow, click here                                              Bethany

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