The Libary - Lesson 6 of Writing Workshop

The Libary

Feb. 4, 2008

Lesson 6 of Writing Workshop

This is writing lesson 6.

This lesson is about not using "dead" words. It means that books aren't interesting if we use "dead" words. Here are some "dead" words:

Neat, really, funny, scary, delicious, cute, messy, awesome, big, gorgeous, beautiful, pretty, nice, great, cool, wonderful, awful, fantastic, bad, good, dirty, boring.

Here is a picture of my 'ship.' I don't like drawing ships! (that's why it is not good.)

Her room was exactly how she had left it- the bed unmade, yesterday's school clothes hanging carelessly over a chair, and her nightgown lying in a heap on the floor. Books and papers lay atop her chest of drawers, with stood open. A dusty saddle blanket lay discarded in a corner, completed the unappealing scene.

So this is what I did.

In my bedroom my pink fluffy slippers lie beside my bed. Our key-board sits in the corner and my drawers are next to it.On the wall,my books stay in my 3 book shelfs. And on my drawers sits my doll-house with my purple-pink CD player.

Well, what did you think? To do writing lessons with Mrs. Marlow, click here

Bethany

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Feb. 15, 2008 - Lesson 6

Posted by skmarlow

Bethany, you have done a fine job on your bedroom tour. You even have variety in your sentences. You told me a lot in just a few sentences--using color and specific words that gave me a picture. I couldn't find any dead words. Nice!

You're coming along well.

Oh, and I like your new template. Booklover does a nice job, doesn't she?

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Feb. 19, 2008 - Untitled Comment

Posted by alizona

Yes, I am BookLover and CarrotLover's sister. Thanks for stopping by my blog again! :o)

Since you live in the UK, do you speak with an accent? (Well, from my perspective!) I think accents are fun.

Alison

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Feb. 22, 2008 - Hey.

Posted by DadandJDL