The Libary - Lesson 9 of Writing Workshop

The Libary

Jan. 24, 2009

Lesson 9 of Writing Workshop

Lesson 9. A thought,

I wonder why I've never thought to explore the other end of the beach, thought Jo looking around. What on earth is that? she asked herself, casting a gaze on a blue, half-hidden object covered in seaweed. With a sudden burst of energy, she climbed over rocks and shells until she reached it. 'Look here!' help me uncover all the seaweed and rubbish!' hollered Jo. 'Coming,' said Jason, not coming at all, scuffing his feet on the sand. 'Look what I found now,' said Jo excitedly a few minutes later. 'What do you s'pose it is?' asked Jason while he tried to snatch the box.

Hope this 'hooks' your attention, Mrs. Marlow!

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Jan. 24, 2009 - Lesson 9

Posted by SuzyScribbles

Bethany, this does indeed "hook" my attention. Beginning it with a "thought" was a unique choice, and you did it very well.
Nice, nice job. No corrections or suggestions here!

One question....Are you working on an actual story these days? Are you going to post one when you do?

Keep up the great work!

P.S. Did you know that my publisher wants me to write some Early Chapter books for little kids, using Andi and Taffy? I'm excited. I decided to call the first one, Pony Trouble. Andi wants a horse. She thinks she's too big to ride a pony any longer. So she'll have some troubles and adventures and in the end she'll get Taffy for her birthday.
Sound fun?

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