The Libary

Sep. 9, 2009

Chapter 3

Hi ya! Scroll down my blog to read Chapter 1 and 2, the let me know what you think. :-)

PS hope you like it, and if you point out any spelling points or something, just comment.

The sun was rising as Joanna Anderson was awaking. Sleeping on a hard, cold ground with wet night dew made Jo wish she had been more thankfull for the bed she had at home. She sat up and looked around franticly, looking for the mare and the little fillie. She spotted them not far off, the mare eating grass and the little foal frolicking round her mother's side. Thank goodness, she sighed with instant relief. She rose and clucked to the mare, and it followed her. Were is the way out of this tangle of a forest? she thought with an uncomfortable feeling. Lord, please protect us from any danger, she prayed silently. Then she realised how hungry she was. Maybe I could catch a fish, she thought. I've read somewere that you can 'tickle' a fish and catch it with your hands. And I'm so thirsty too, the little fillie will be all right with its mother's milk, but the mare needs something to drink too. She looked around but heard nothing of a gurgeling stream. It looks like I'll have to look for one. she thought unhappily.

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A little while later she found one, and drank her fill. Then, after maybe an hour of trying, she caught a smallish fish, but it got away. Then after all her efforts, she caght one, then knocked it out with a rock. Hmm... she thought. How will I start a fire to cook it? I don't know how to. In fact, I don't know anything about survival. She sat down and put her hand against a tree to level her self, and it was only when she sat down when she realised that she had blood on her hand. She was rather confused, because she knew she hadn't a cut and felt no pain. What on earth?... she thought, then she saw it. Prints, maybe bigger than an adult's hand. Jo froze. Bears...she thought, a shiver travelled down her spine. Fish...they like fish. She glanced down at the fish in her hand. I'll make a run for it on the mare, she thought instantly. "Come here," she whistled softly. She slipped on bareback and urged her into canter. Jo was thankfull the fillie had sense to follow her mother. Suddenly she heard a low growl. Jo was filled with fear. Bears can easily outrun people, she thought. But I wonder can they out run horses? Should I risk it? She urged it into a gallop, hoping the fillie would have strength to catch up. She slowed down to trot, and looked back, the fillie was now by her side. The bear, a huge big brown thing, was running. Jo knew if she didn't act quickly, the foal, the mare, or even herself would be killed.

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Jo slowed back down to a trot then stopped and turned the mare around. She dug into her pocket, and bought out the fish. She flung it with all her might and it hit the bear's snout, then bounced onto the ground by its paw. The bear sniffed around then caught hold of the fish. What if it isn't enough for the bear, then it comes closer to us? Jo worried. she dismounted from the mare then picked up a few rocks and pelted the bear with them. The bear soon got angry and tired of getting pelted and soon crawled out of sight. Jo heaved a huge sigh of relief. Now, if only I could get my horse and go home, this sure is one hang of a mess I'm in.

                                                [chapter 4 coming soon]

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Oct. 7, 2009 - <em>Untitled Comment</em>

Posted by SavedGirl

Dear Bethany,

I love the story. You are doing a good job. I can't wait for the next chapter. Oh, you might want to fix the blog title, you left an r out of library. :) And since you mentioned about pointing out spelling errors I wanted to suggest that a spell check is really helpful. Usually a web browser has one in the toolbar, or if you type it in Word or Works or something there should be a spellcheck.

Lulu

Edited by SavedGirl on Oct. 7, 2009 at 7:34 PM

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Oct. 22, 2009 - Great!

Posted by SuzyScribbles

Sorry it's taken so LONG to come over here. I haven't been on HSB much at all.
I love your story. It is exciting, and I can see you using so many of the things you learned about in the writing class. A great opening hook, and good chapter openings as well. Lots of things happening in this story and it moves fast.
And the surprise of a new foal is quite a good plot twist!
Keep it up.
Oh you have "Library" spelled wrong on your blog. You should fix that.

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I'm not really a book writer yet. I don't why I called myself that! This blog is for writing lessons and stories. :-)