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Jun. 4, 2008
lesson 5

Tabitha jumped and shrieked because the bee stung her!

Rachel jumped, laughed and twirled for joy that they finally closed on their house

Samantha jumped back w/ a punding heart because she felt something jump on her shoulder but then she realized it was just her pet bird :)

Erin's stomach growled and her mouth watered when Rachel mentioned pizza.  It was then that she realized how hungry she really was.


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Jun. 4, 2008 - Lesson 5

Posted by skmarlow

Boy, Sarah, you know how to say things in just a few words! You used a lot of different examples for showing and not telling feelings, and they are done well. I'd like to see you expand on this as you start writing your own story. Hopefully a few short sentences can turn into more as you practice showing your characters' feelings in your stories.

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