On the little red riding hood I only got the part where it said what her mom packed for her grandma.
OK I'll do this with Tabitha and Rachel. And the setting is sitting on a hilltop on a stary night.
Rachel and Tabitha were sitting on a hill with bright green, prickly grass with purple, orange and yellow wild flowers all around them. It was a very starry night and the stars were as bright as the moon and so shiny! Rachel looked up and said "Hey! Is that the big dipper and is that Orion?".
"Hey yah! And that's the little dipper! Right?" Said Tabitha.
"Yah but I'm getting tired lets go in and read or something." Said Rachel "And anyways this grass is hurting me!
"Okay! Good night!" Said Tabitha.
Jun. 6, 2008 - Lesson 8
So on the Little Red Riding Hood assignment you checked your work on the next page and saw the other sentence that was unnecessary? Hopefully you studied it and decided why I crossed it out.....
The scene with Tabitha and Rachel has some good description of the grass and the flowers. How does the grass feel? Is it soft like cotton? Maybe they are sitting prickly grass with weeds that prick them on the legs and arms. Just a LITTLE more to give me the "feel" of being there with them. Are the stars twinkling and blinking? Choose some unusual descriptive words for variety.
HA! I'm really challenging you, aren't I? I want you to really THINK when you do these lessons. They are fun, but they are a lot of work, too---especially if you want to honestly earn the certificate, by doing your best work.
As far as Lesson 9 goes (you commented about wanting to read non-existing stories!), YOU may take any of those beginning "hooks" and create a short story of your own. I just made all those up. They did not come from real books. So grab one and write a story! I'd be happy to read it. Hopefully that lesson will help you think about how important it is to start a story well (interesting).
Jun. 12, 2008 - Untitled Comment
Just checking in to see how you're doing! I hope the lessons are not getting too difficult for you, but they start out easy and then do tend to get harder as they go along. If you have any questions, just leave me a comment somewhere. :-)
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