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Posted by skmarlow

I could read this too, Nathan.
Oh, I liked how you made "He scowled back" a separate paragraph. That is perfectly acceptable and really adds emphasis to the scene. :-)

You forgot to indent when Katie starts talking--- "Who's asking you to?"
But I think it was a slip and not a "not knowing" problem.
Nice job!

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Posted by SuzyScribbles

OK, so are you going to report in over here on your Bible progress? Hope so! Everyone else will visit too. Make friends! share!

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