Apr. 11, 2008 - Spring Poem
This morning while we were walking, I noticed that Elijah kept saying some really cool things about spring. I told him when we got home that we'd work on putting his words in a poem.
I gave him prompts such as
I smell spring...
I see spring...
I feel spring...
I hear spring...
He changed the line to I see some spring. This was hard for me since every word counts in poetry, and it's best to elminiate (what I call) "wimpy" words, but I decided not to make it in to a battle. I think, in the end, it worked nicely for him.
I formed his words (mostly his exact words) in to lines since I think lining is a hard concept to grasp, but I may have him copy the poem in his own handwriting, and that will give us a chance to discuss line and why it is important in poetry (it's *usually* best to end on a strong word).
I also added "stealing my brother's hat" -- he was trying to think what to say about the wind, and the wind really did carry Simon's hat away this morning! The rest are his words. :) I think tea time with poetry is really paying off! He included so many images without any prompting from me!
God Made Spring
by Elijah
I smell some spring
fresh
like lemons
in the sky
I see some spring
green
peaceful grass
red buds on trees
I feel some spring
sun
rising on me
wind stealing my brother's hat
I hear some spring
birds
singing like an opera
in the sky
If you decide to do this exercise with your own students, please post and leave me a note in the comments, so I can read their spring poems (Elijah would love that).
Comments
Apr. 15, 2008 - spring poems
Posted by Jolanthe
I'm posting some poems today on our homeschool blog. :)
The kids had fun with this.
Here's the link:
http://homeschoolcreations.blogspot.com/2008/04/spring-poems.html
Jolanthe
Apr. 17, 2008 - Untitled Comment
Posted by Robinlyn
Elijah, that was a great poem! I especially liked the line about the birds sounding like an opera in the sky. Wonderful!
Apr. 17, 2008 - Untitled Comment
Posted by Anonymous
Excellent job! Please tell him so.
Edwena from FIAR
Apr. 22, 2008 - Untitled Comment
Posted by magg93
That is the cutest poem!
I try to create poems and I am sure that he has an earlier and better grip in his mind on the subject.
Tell him I enjoyed it thoroughly!
Love
Maggie
Apr. 24, 2008 - Untitled Comment
Posted by Anonymous
Ami,
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Edwena
Apr. 24, 2008 - Untitled Comment
Posted by Shutterbug
Elijah-
Great poem! I can picture a whole spring day when I read it! :)
I hope you get to enjoy the outside a lot more as the weather continues to be nice.
Have a great day!
Forrest's Mom :)
