Thursday 27 November 2008
Jake~...but not for real...
Posted in Posted by Jane Austen
Ok...this majorly short story is to free Jack out of the Evil R.K.'s dungeon, and just for the record...Jake doesn't REALLY die...he is still my character...This is JUST to free Jack...lol
Jordin looked into Jake's eyes. This wasn't how it was suppose to be, they needed more time.
Blood leaked down Jake's chin and pooled to the floor. When did everything go so wrong?
Jordin touched his cheek. Love took her so much by surprise, it really shouldn't of, but the thing called love was a strange thing indeed. But now, Jake was going to die, and it was for real this time.
Jordin's heart broke and felt it crumble to pieces.
"Jake, you know I love you. I'll love you till I die."
"I love you." Jake's breathing slowed. "Will you marry me?"
"Yes." Jordin said through a tearful smile. "It would be my honor."
Jordin lowered her head, tears freely flowing now. Grief poured out, coursing down her cheeks.
"My Love." she whispered.
Jake's blue eyes closed for the last time with a slight smile on his face, dying with peace in his eyes.
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Thursday 27 November 2008 - Untitled Comment
Posted by Storyteller
Whoa, that was good!
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Thursday 27 November 2008 - Untitled Comment
Posted by evergraceful
That was so sad.But it was Great!
Martha F.
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Thursday 27 November 2008 - MUAHAHAHAHA!!!
Posted by Pip
MUAHAHAHAHAHAHAHHAHAHA!!!!!!!!!!! Jack is free and I RELISHED EVERY WORD!!! *runs off madly into the grim mists*
R.K.
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Friday 28 November 2008 - Untitled Comment
Posted by Barrie
That was so sad!
~Barrie
And so short.
~Coridin
Hush up, Coridin.
~Barrie
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Friday 28 November 2008 - Untitled Comment
Posted by narnialover95
*sobs* IT'S SO SAD!!!! *sobs* :( Good job though :)
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Friday 28 November 2008 - Untitled Comment
Posted by EowynDernhelm
*sniff* WOW...
That was really sad.
But awesome.
I can't write sorrow in my book for the life of me. I stink at it. :P
Lucy
Edited by EowynDernhelm on Friday 28 November 2008 at 07:59 AM
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Friday 28 November 2008 - Untitled Comment
Posted by throughtheblack
WHAT???? NOOOOO!!!!!
He can't die..*sniff* he can't.
I have to say that this story is really good! I as hooked on it from the first sentence.
-Emily Dickinson
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Saturday 29 November 2008 - Untitled Comment
Posted by Lois Leppard
That is soooo sad!!!!! REALLY! I am crying!!!!!
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