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Okay, I've decided I'm going to post one of my songs on here. *opens her mouth in a silent scream*
Well, it's not really a song yet. I was hoping for some help. I have 2 verses and 4 chorus parts [2 sung each after each verse]. Here's my dilemma. I don't believe it sounds quite right the way I have it now, so if there are any suggestions please tell me! Switch the verses around, the chorus parts, whatever! Plus, it needs more to the song and I don't know how I should end it. =~\ So, yeah. Just any help you might have would be greatly appreciated. by the way, the parts in these: [...] are not actually part of the song.
Here goes.
Verse 1:
When the darkness closes in on me,
When the air, seems to hard to breathe,
When all I see is misery,
What time I am afraid,
I will trust in Thee [psalm 56:3]
Chorus 1:
Cause, when the darkness was all around,
Thou saith,
Let there be light! [Genesis 1:3]
and the sun shone bright
Chorus 2:
And, when the darkness filled their hearts,
Thou saith,
Let the waters fill the world,
and righteousness ruled.
Verse 2:
When it seems, I can no longer cope,
All I need is to let go of the rope,
Surrender myself to Thee,
It is then finally, I will be free
Chorus3:
When the darkness filled his cell,
Thou saith,
Joseph to you,
My blessing will not quell
Chorus4:
And, when the darkness made him cold as ice,
Thou saith,
Lazarus Rise!
And he opened his eyes...
Okay! That's all I have right now. If you are wondering what it sounds like...well, to me, it is kind of a mixture of:
•It Takes A Saviour-Annie Moses Band [well, more just inspired by this song.]
•Hungarian Rhapsody-Franz Liszt
•Hungarian Dance-Johannes Brahms
Yup. Weird. So, tell me what you think of it, and remember, suggestions welcome!!!
oh it is WONDERFUL!!!!!! I want to HERE it now !!!!! I like the verses, and it is soooo lovely! I like the first verse especially :D I know this isn't a long comment (do forgive me ;) ) But I must go to bed now...
But please, if you have any more verses, let me know!!
I fare ye well!!!
~Molly
Oh, I really liked that! Good job! So, do you like writing songs or stories better? Annie Moses Band has you in it's clutches now, does it?
God Bless,
The infamous Snick
Zel! It's AWESOME!!!!!!!!! You do NOT need ANY help from me! It's SOOOO good!!!!! I don't know a couple of the tunes that you posted..... Only the "Hungarian Dance" sooo I don't really know what it sounds like. Sorry! KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK!!!!!!!!!
;-)Syd/Johnson
WOW! That was REALLY good Zel! You are a wonderful song writer! I can't wait to read more of them! I love how you use verses in it! Keep up the good work!!!!
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