Apr. 28, 2008
My Story [Part 3] --

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They were about to head back when Kit saw something on the grass. She walked over and inspected it carefully without touching it. It was a red handkerchief. There wasn't anything interesting about it but Kit dug a plastic bag out of her pocket. She picked it up and then tied a secure knot before stuffing it into her pocket. “Well, we'll see what it has for us back at headquarters. See anything else?”

Jeremy scanned the area and then shook his head. “Nope, nothing out of the ordinary.”

Kit nodded. “That's it, there isn't anything else so we'll head back,” she started back to the path and soon they were on their way back to the stables. They were halfway there when Kit got that strange feeling that people get when they're being watched. She glanced sideways at the brush on the side of the trail, but didn't slow her pace. She didn't want there to be any signs that she had noticed whatever or whoever it was. Nothing looked out of the ordinary but the feeling didn't go away. She looked over at Jeremy, curious to see if he had noticed anything. She could tell that he had for he wasn't loping along at his usual carefree pace, he kept jumping at every sound and gawking into the woods. He saw Kit looking at him and started to say something. Kit raised a finger to her lips and nodded. “I know,” she whispered as she stopped to listen. Someone was definitely there, she knew it, and they didn't want to be seen. She loosened the strap on her gun, making sure it would come out quickly and easily when she wanted it. A twig snapped and Kit dove towards the noise.

There was a rustling noise as a shadow started barreling away. It was a man, tall and thickly built but it wasn't bright enough to see anything else. “Stop!” Kit called, running for the retreating form.

Jeremy was close behind her, breathing hard with excitement. They ran for a while but the shadow soon disappeared, it had had a head start and was much faster than either of them.

Kit stopped and let out an annoyed breath. Looking back at Jeremy, who was clearly disappointed, she said, “Well, that's that. He didn't want to be caught, that's for sure. The sooner we get back to report the better,” with that she began wading through the bracken again.

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Mar. 16, 2008 - Untitled Comment

Posted by SeaChel

Coolies!!!!!! :-D

~SeaChel

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Mar. 17, 2008 - Untitled Comment

Posted by skmarlow

Ah...the plot thickens. Who is that guy? And why would he hang around the scene of the crime. I'm sure these (and more) questions will soon be answered by our mystery writer. Yes?

It's a good read, but I'd like to suggest something to make it even more enjoyable to read. Please indent and break the story up into paragraphs. Plain print for page upon page wearies the reader's eyes. It's not hard to push "enter" on the Word document and the "tab" when it's time for a new paragraph. Sometimes the "enter" automatically makes a new indented paragraph.

And...you ARE writing this on your computer and then copying and pasting it into your blog, right? If not, I highly suggest you do. Your computer won't crash as likely as the HSB blog sites. Save it in a file on the desktop and it will copy and paste nicely into your blog.

That's my advice for the day. LOL

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