Mar. 19, 2008
Lesson 14 --

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Blast it! Does anyone know how I can indent on here?!?! I've tried to figure it out, even looked through an HTML guide but I can't do it!! Please post if you have any tips!



Kit felt moisture on her face and jerked awake at the shock of its chill. Her brown head popped up from underneath the thick blanket she had been dozing under, dark brown eyes alert as they scanned the area, wondering what was going on. "Captain Louis! What's wrong?" Kit called over the roar of the river. Her blanket was soaked and she was shivering.

"We're heading into some troubled waters," the man that Kit had addressed, Louis, answered, "we got caught in a current and I couldn't pull us out of it."

Kit looked around, it was dark but one could still see that the waters were rough. "What can I do to help?"

"Well," Louis hesitated, as if he wasn't sure if he should tell her to do something. He had almost not allowed to come with him on his exploration, but she had begged so hard that he couldn't leave her at the camp. "You can hold tight. There isn't much we can do right now anyways. I'll be sure to tell you if there is something."

Kit frowned, wishing hard that she had been born a boy, but did as she was told. She reached over for the leather loop that had been fashioned to help people keep from getting thrown overboard. Suddenly the boat lurched and Kit found that she was partly in the air, before she could be worried though, she landed on the hard wood again. She out a breath of air with a whoosh as she grabbed her knee. "Ow..."

"You alright?" Louis's voice sounded worried.

"Yeah, just banged my knee," Kit grumbled as she rubbed her wounded knee.

"Take that pole there, paddle, help me keep the raft level."

Kit nodded and seized the long pole that was used to paddle on the raft. With a smooth motion she plunged it into the water, deeper and deeper until she could feel the hard bottom of the river. "Sure is shallow here," she commented.
"Yeah, that's just what I'm worried about."

Kit didn't say anymore, but concentrated on her work as they started going faster. The raft began to bounce and fine spray met her face as she squinted against it.

"Look out!" Kit heard Louis shout a moment too late. She felt herself become airborne again, but this time she didn't land on the hard wood, but cold water.

"Louis!" Kit struggled not to scream as she felt the current trying to pull her down. Her eyes were screwed shut as she felt something slapping at her face. Branches! Kit reached out to grasp one. Her hand succeeded in gripping one at last, but the water had made it so slick that it slipped right out of her desperate hand. She was swept away from the branches and dunked under the water. She came up spluttering and was about to call out again when she felt a pain in her shoulder as something struck it. Her hand went out instantly and grasped something solid, something rough. "Louis!" Kit started to say but instead found herself coughing up a mouthful of water. As soon as she had recovered herself she started pulling herself out of the water, onto the raft. The raft tilted unnervingly but she made it up safely. For a moment she just lay, trying to stop her head from spinning. Very soon after she had heaved herself up she felt a warm hand on her forehead.

"Are you alright? Kit say something!"

No. I want to go to sleep. Leave this cold place...

"Kit! Wake up!"

A sudden, stinging sensation on her cheeks brought Kit to her senses. "Ouch," she groaned before cracking open her eyes. "Are we out?"

Louis chuckled. "Yes, we're out of the crazy water. Don't doze off or I shall be forced to slap you again."

Kit laughed weakly. "I'm fine," she tried to convince Louis. Louis said nothing and when kit looked over to see why she saw that he had disappeared. "What in the world?" Kit sat up and looked around. Everything started to fade away into... pink walls? Yes, and the raft was dissipating into a soft bed. "No!" Kit's shoulders sagged and she scowled fiercely at the wall. "Aw man, I really hate dreams sometimes."

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Mar. 19, 2008 - Lesson 14

Posted by skmarlow

Your character, Kit, has the most exciting adventures! You've put her in so many scenes and lessons, that I'm beginning to think of her as a real friend! LOL

This is a great scene--it moves along and uses feelings, dialogue, description, and the other elements I asked you to use! What a time she and Louis had. Then...it was a dream! A surprising twist. I didn't expect that. :-)

Oh, my suggestion to indent is this:
Write your story on the computer in a Word document, using indenting and all that, like a regular story. Then copy and paste it into your post. That is what I did here, and look! It worked!

http://www.homeschoolblogger.com/AndiStories/476499/

You might ask Alizona, too, as her Kate Dunlap stories are--I believe--indented. If nothing else, skip lines between paragraphs and that will work as indenting in a pinch. :-(

You should probably be writing at least your STORY on the computer, in case HSB goes down sometime. You'd lose everything, unless you know how to back up your files on HSB?

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